- Former Child Stars (Jon Dhama)
Big melodies and captivating grooves have always been at the heart of the music Jon Dhama makes. Under the pseudonym Former Child Stars, Jon is finally making the music he is most passionate about. Taking inspiration from all genres, but heavily inspired by artists such as The Smiths, David Bowie, The Stone Roses, Oasis and the Beatles; Jon has a unique ability to blend diverse influences, evoking an emotional and cohesive sound that needs to be heard. Born in Toronto, Jon has been making music for over 20 years with his brother Justin and a tight knit group of like-minded artists, playing a vital role in bands with local cult followings. Jon fronted and wrote music for the indie rock band the Drip Melody, and played lead guitar and co-wrote music for My Home The Stars. Despite Jon's past contributions, Former Child Stars promises to be his most enduring musical endeavour yet.
- Toronto, ON
I like it, but there I hear places where work can be done. The intro, for example, seems short and abrupt. I would have preferred to hear an instrumental lead-up to the vocals. But when we get into the meat of the song, it's very pleasant with a nice singalong quality. The breakdown at about 2:30 is entirely appropriate. It sets up the momentum for the last 60 seconds. Another producer might take that last minute to build up the arrangement into something a little more anthemic with a fuller sound to bring the song home. Finally, the ending, like the intro, is a little unsatisfying when it comes to bringing the song to a conclusion. Does it fade or does it end with a last chord? In either situation, I'd like to have heard another 8 or 16 bars to complement the momentum brought up in the last chorus. Bottom line? The song is great in the middle but needs re-imagining on either end.
Cool song with a lo-fi, indie vibe. Not sure if this is mastered but I like the organic feel to the track as it seems to fit the personality on display well. Def a chill track with a great instrumental outro and good hooks that I could see a wider group of people digging. If you're working on a debut, don't be shy, just get it out there as it's easier now than ever to do that! I would also suggest that you include a brief bio, lyrics, a description of the track and links to your social media / to hear more music in your Fluence submission so people can find out more about you. This is your elevator pitch in front of the right people so you want to make it as easy as possible for listeners to get the full picture and find more of your music if they're interested. The same should apply when you're promoting your music to a fanbase. If you're not already, be sure to use all of the available and FREE artist tools across the DSPs like Spotify for Artists, Apple Music for Artists, Amazon Music for Artists and Bandcamp's artist platform as these will provide great insight into your fanbase, how your music is performing and allow you to optimize your profiles and pitch for inclusion on playlists in certain instances. If you're looking for more promotion and building a fanbase you should consider hiring a publicist or a marketing firm that you feel you can trust and is a fan of your music to help with the release of your next single and/or album to help you get visibility on blogs, playlisting, etc. If you're not already on a label, consider trying to get signed to one as they can help you with the promo and playlist pitching. Best of luck!
Hi John - small apology for it taking a moment to get back to you - what with the holidays and all. I had a chance to listen - nice song for sure. It's not quite what I'm looking for at the moment -- but I do have some advice. There can be a really powerful thing you can be using in your songs and productions which is the secret of th 2nd melody. LIterally no one talks about this but essentially it's hooking your fans with another melody - BESIDES the melody the singer sings. I break it all down here - could be some value there - and it's one song comment i'm picking up listening to the song: https://www.benjamingroff.com/blog/2nd-melodies-aka-the-riff Also - as a bonus / freebie...I just released a book that's now #1 in 7 new release categories in Amazon called "How Do I Get A Record Deal? Sign Yourself" - 280 pages of advice...feel free to get it free here if you like: https://www.benjamingroff.com/get-the-book Hope it's helpful!
First, love the name. Good choice. Second, no notes from me on songwriting, performance or production. It's nice. The only thing you might consider is length. At 4:40, it might--MIGHT--be too long for some radio programs. I know, I know--but it's the way they think. Even a 30-second edit would work. (Fade the coda, maybe?) Third, some questions: 1. What are your plans? Radio airplay? Sync opportunities? Placement on streaming playlists? 2. If radio is your thing, you'll need a couple of things: (a) a track recorded of being able to attract fans (live, mailing lists, social media engagement) and (b) a radio plugger, someone to help you get in front of music directors. 3. Speaking of social media, you'll need a strategy. You need to be on all platforms--and you need to pay attention to any feedback you get from those platforms. 4. Is there money in the budget for a music video? You need to get on YouTube. Even a lyric video would be fine. 5. Make friends with bloggers. Every one of them want to take credit for discovering the Next Big Thing. Let me share this on my networks. Let's see what kind of feedback you get.
That is a lovely song title for sure and it goes a good way to illustrating your jangle pop that is so characteristic of the early 90's twee pop sound. The production quality here is far superior to that scene though, while still retaining the sense of cherished lo-fism. What really struck me was how you've captured the yearning that is critical for the success of bedroom artists. This is a song to cry to, dance with and generally have the best time possible on your own.