My name is Mike. I've been in the music game for a while. I have written, recorded, and played music for a long while. I used to lead a band that had some opportunities to play with big acts like the guys from The Lumineers, Lifehouse, Guster, and others. I love being creative, and want to showcase that to others. I am flying solo these days, trying my hand with solo releases.
- Ho Ho Kus
Hi Mike - thanks for the submission. It's a sweet song - like definitely solid. I actually signed The Lumineers back in the day. One thing that might be helpful and add some juice to your song are what I call "2nd Melodies." Right now I think you have vocal + chords. Or look at it this way. Melody + Chords. But what if you could do Melody + Melody aka having a riff or a 2nd melody figure vs just chords. This is the bedrock of rock music - be it soft rock or rock or indie rock or singer/songwriters. There's actually a whole post I did on this subject here if you want to take a look! https://www.benjamingroff.com/blog/2nd-melodies-aka-the-riff So - I like the song but as far as some feedback - that's one thing that I could hear that could make it better - or worth checking this out across your other songs. Also - if you want some more advice on promotion - as a bonus you can get my free book 185 pages on my website too...just look for it in the menu. Lots of great stuff there that I think you might find valuable. Hope it helps!
Hey Mike - nice song and also dig the visual - eye catching right from the start. I do like the song - just thinking what would put it over the top. I was going to say a vocal arrangement - I hear you're doing that in the whoa whoa part in the bridge but have you thought about making your choruses even bigger by layering up your leads more and some other vocal arrangements...i hear you have "some" vocal arrangement there but think you could pump that up. I think the chorus is really memorable but I'm not sure if I could remember the verses as much. There are some tools and tips on how to better your verses though and make them stand out. This post actually has a huge deep dive on to that and might be worth checking out. In other words I could remember your chorus (which i think is really solid) but maybe not so much the verse? https://www.benjamingroff.com/blog/writing-better-verses Hope it's helpful. Sounds like you're heading in the right direction.