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I like the sound I like the power and clarity of the voice. I found the video itself a bit problematic. (I don't like that he smokes.) I thought at first it would feel like more of a dance. But it just seemed to repeat the same motion, etc. The images aside, I like the spirit of the song, the power of the singer
I like the song. The rhythm is probably a bit conventional these days. But I like how the music kicks in with the vocals. I could see dancing or running to this. It would be awesome in spin class. I hope you keep at it and send me more.
I really like the instrumental and beat. Feels very movie soundtrack. It isn't something I think I would hear on the radio (though it has Goyte vibe) but in the context of an album or a soundtrack I could see it being very effective.
I think you are tackling a very important issue. I think it's a powerful message and the rap is pointed. I think you need to credit your statistics to ground them (maybe a rolling credit at the end). But before you do that you need to consider how some of those stats conflict with each other: 12 percent of homeless have jobs, but unemployment is the primary cause, yet 45% of homeless have mental illness or substance abuse. So unemployment is the primary cause but mentally ill people or substance abusers have a hard time holding down a job. So is the lack of job really the root cause? I think you have to carefully consider how the stats make a case...maybe reorder with a bit t follow more logic, some of which you have, but structure would be...who is homeless (black. white, domestic violence victis, mental ill, substance abusers-) how they become homeless (lack of housing, lack of jobs) how long they are homeless (years on streets; jail is biggest homeless shelter, etc) you can end where you do--how homelessness can happen to anyone... but maybe a tag on what someone who has watched this should now do...
Hi, Jared. I like this but I wonder if you're hitting folks over the head a bit much. Would it be better to do this without a lionheart picture. To me a lionheart is anyone doing anything brave, fierce, fighting for something. I wonder if attaching it to a picture of a lion undercuts the spirit a bit. I would love to see your music attached to video more than still pictures. I feel like you're writing soundtracks to characters you've yet to find.
I like the powerfully positive message. And the video itself is incredibly accomplished. I wish the images were about something else like working or doing a job. Because that's when you really need a heart of the champion. When you need to find the fight within.
First, you look like a young Rob Lowe. The guitar playing and musicianship is very accomplished. I like the mood of the song. I couldn't quite figure out what it was about. I got the feeling but didn't quite see the images. I think it's hard for a song like this to catch on without that visual cue, but I think there is a lot to offer here.
I like it. I think the music has a mix of Celtic and Country. It also has that Lumineers new folk feel. I think the song itself isn't as good as the music, so maybe that needs tweaking. Some lyrics are lovely, others feel like you have the wrong words. I think you want to listen to Mary Chapin Carpenter and Fun and get that songwriting to a crisper place. Make it a bit more poetic. But thank you for sharing.